I think I did a good job with my showing scenes. I enjoy writing them the most. I critique them until I have them exactly perfect in my opinion. I try to put blank eyes on, someone who was not there to experience the event themselves. I picture it in my brain until it feels as if they were right there experiencing it there with me. I think I could have put more thought into the beginning, I didn't give myself enough time to enjoy writing this. I think my purpose is confusing. I didn't have a specific idea of my purpose while writing this, and now when I review it I am still a bit unsure.
Writing my "Out of Place" narrative was surprisingly difficult for me. I did quite a large part of it in class a few days after the event actually took place. My memories were fresh in my mind, and I could write them down swiftly. After that following weekend, I put writing my narrative off, and I forgot where I wanted to go with my story.
I think I did a good job with my showing scenes. I enjoy writing them the most. I critique them until I have them exactly perfect in my opinion. I try to put blank eyes on, someone who was not there to experience the event themselves. I picture it in my brain until it feels as if they were right there experiencing it there with me. I think I could have put more thought into the beginning, I didn't give myself enough time to enjoy writing this. I think my purpose is confusing. I didn't have a specific idea of my purpose while writing this, and now when I review it I am still a bit unsure.
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My initial thoughts of creating this website is I am very excited! I have my weebly account from my English Composition I course, in which I created for that class. I think it's awesome I am able to look back at the things I wrote previously, and critique them!
I don't mind posting my blogs to the public, I don't feel like it's a lack of privacy, and I will only put on here what I'm willing to share with people I don't know. My goal is to look back, view my writing, and critique it to make it better! In class this past week we covered possible topics for our I-Search paper. I have narrowed my topic down at least, to feminism. After being in class Tuesday I realized how interesting this topic is to me. While on Facebook a few weeks ago, I came across a blog shared by someone on my friends list called "Slut Walk". The main picture that came up first was a girl holding a sign talking about the man who raped her. It was quite interesting to me in the first place that the movement was titled "Slut Walk". After telling my professor, he questioned me and made me think of why they would even call this protest such a name. I was completely intrigued. These girls are sexually harassed and are called whores and sluts, and in contrast call themselves these things. An outside blog post I found myself reading and being interested in was Nikolay Kozma's Week 10 Reflection talking about the video Potty-Mouthed Princesses.
In class on Thursday my professor asked the class to get into groups and discuss our Room for Debate topic we chose to reflect on. I decided to reflect on an article about Physician Assisted Suicide. I had asked my peers their feelings on this highly debated topic, and the majority of them responded with "it's not necessarily the best thing, but could be helpful." One of my group members in particular had a very different response. She mentioned that she can see why assisted suicide could be a good alternative, but then she mentioned to her personally it would be against her religion. I never thought about religion playing a part in this and she really opened my eyes to different views people may have. This past week at home nothing exciting happened. My dad is a car salesmen at Faulkner Chevrolet in Lancaster, and he just traded in his previous car for a MR2 Spyder. I can't wait to go home this week to drive it! Last week in my English Composition course we started watching a movie called "Food INC". This movie was a lot more terrifying that I originally thought it would be. I figured that I would be grossed out by watching where my food apparently comes from, but that's just putting it lightly. I think after watching this entire movie I will most likely become a vegetarian and/or only eat organic food. Student Blog Assignment Comment Monday evening before driving back to West Chester I decided to get Oscar (my pet hedgehog) out to play. He is nocturnal, so of course all he was concerned about was snuggling up to me and sleeping. Class: In this last week we read an article called "Everyone knew I was gay, except my brother." This article was very interesting to read and I really enjoyed it. I can't imagine being in that type of situation with my sister. My sister is my best friend, and hiding anything from her is impossible. Especially something that important. My best friend Olivia is homosexual and she's the most amazing person I've ever met. I've watched her interact with her older brother, and it's interesting seeing how much he respects her. This article I think can definitely relate to Olivia and her coming out to her big brother. Class: For this section of my blog post, my professor asked us to find a "telling" sentence in our blog, and make it a "showing" sentence.
"Lately at home I've had quite a lot going on. Last Thursday I finally got my car that I've been waiting so long for." Lately at home I've had quite a lot going on. Last Thursday I finally got my car that I've been waiting so long for. When I finally sat on the warm black leather that the sun has been warming all day it finally felt real. I put my hands on the smooth steering wheel, then on the shift knob. I pushed the clutch down with my foot. I took a deep breath, slowly the smell of the car flowed through my nostrils. My dad looks at me and smiles. "So? Do you like it?!" I replied with, "to say that I like it would be an underestimate Class:
In class these past two weeks we've learned about numerous topics I enjoyed. One specifically pertaining to the writer's roundtable assignment. The most intriguing article I thought, was "How Can You Create Fiction When Reality Comes to Call?" By Carolyn Chute. I chose to read this article last for no specific reason. I am certainly glad I did this, considering it was the one that stuck to me. Every time I reread this article, I feel as if the author has multiple meanings behind every metaphor she writes. This article definitely confused me constantly. Chute's writing puts so many different pictures, thoughts, and ideas in my mind. I feel as if she is almost challenging the reader, and this is what made me enjoy actually reading the paper. Home: My first day back to West Chester this week was Monday evening. Tuesday I had classes from 8 AM to 3 PM. As soon as I got back to my apartment I was ready to explore this somewhat still new area with Derek. Before Derek and I headed out to dinner, I got a phone call from my mother. This is nothing unusual, considering she calls me about three times a day. While on the phone with my mother, she informs me that my best friend of 7 years Ashley's mother has stage four cervical cancer. I immediately called Ashley, although I was so unsure of what I would say. As soon as she picked up the phone I could hear it in her voice. Me: "Hi Ash.. how are ya doin?..." Ashley: "Eh I'm hangin' in there, how are you?" Right then and there I broke down. How could Ashley even think about someone else besides her mom or herself, to ask me how I am?! I didn't want Ashley to hear me cry because I knew it wouldn't help her mental state of mind, but I couldn't stop. Me: "How bad is it Ashley?" Ashley: "She has 6 months tops to live. If she makes it past that she's in the 15% range. She hasn't woken up yet from surgery, and she doesn't know what stage she's in, or how long she has." Experiencing Ashley be this strong amazes me, and she kind of has to be. I can't imagine losing my mother being 20 years old. Lisa is a wonderful woman and she is the last to deserve this. But no one could ever deserve cancer, right? Class:
During this past week in English Composition 1 I've learned quite a few different things. One of the main things I choose to reflect on is Weebly. I've always been interested in sites such as this. When I was in high school I remember them talking about Weebly, but never using it. I can tell this is going to be a very useful tool for students in our class. Like Mr. Mangini stated in class, the students who are quiet and not very social will most likely flourish on this website. I feel that this class is going to help me succeed in my other classes, and I'm really looking forward to seeing how this all pans out. Home: Lately at home I've had quite a lot going on. Last Thursday I finally got my car that I've been waiting so long for. I've had a Jeep Cherokee for the past two years, and I wasn't happy to get rid of it. Obviously with commuting back and forth from York to West Chester twice a week, a Jeep isn't exactly the best money saver. My dad being a car salesman certainly put my foot in the door. I've been waiting to find a new car that I loved, and I finally did. I'm a very picky person when it comes to cars, only because I'd prefer an SUV. About a week ago I picked up my baby blue 2005 Volkswagen Beetle. Not only is it a convertible, but it is also a manual. When I was telling my father the cars that I liked, I told him the only way I'd want a bug was if it was manual and a convertible. Somehow my father met these expectations and I now have a car not only that I love, but that is a wonderful gas saver. |
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